Hi Brad, that is way cool! I'm Praising God for this. I'll check it out later on today. Thanks and God Bless. Lovingly, Patricia Ferguson At 05:28 PM 7/17/2007, you wrote: >National Public Radio has a local segment here in the Twin Cities >called In The Loop and did a series on the homeless population here >and I sent them She's Long Gone, a tune of mine focused around a >homeless woman and just found out they stuck a link to my tune off >their blog. Not sure how many will see it there but then I sent it >for more of an awareness tool but it's cool it points to my site off >theirs. They said... > >Here's one other related link to check out. After the show aired, >Wisconsin singer-songwriter Brad Dunse emailed us >a tune of his own on the subject > (click the top links at the top of his page for "She's Long > Gone"). He describes it as "a sort of somber yet pointed message of > the replenishment of folks >to the streets, as they are socially invisible to most." Thanks, Brad! > >The link to the blog if you are intrested is... > >http://minnesota.publicradio.org/collections/special/columns/loophole/ > >Or you can hear it on my site at: > >http://www.braddunsemusic.com/music.html > >Brad > > >At 02:47 PM 7/17/2007, you wrote: >>Hi Brad-- Sorry, yup, meant that I liked what I heard of the lift, >>not the bridge. I'll get a chance to dig in more this evening. I'm >>OK with taking it to the workshop. --Dan >> >> >>On Tue, 17 Jul 2007 13:53:52 -0600 >>Brad <[log in to unmask]> wrote: >> > Hi Dan, >> > >> > Umm. I didn't do a bridge yet :)... I'll work on that >> >though. I did Verse lift and chorus, maybe you meant >> >lift? I kind of wondered about the tagging title/hook too >> >but wondered because it stood out melodically from the >> >rest of the chorus perhaps it might work, maybe not >> >then... we'll find something that does. I agree on the >> >flowability issue on the math bit, I kind of like the >> >explanation of the math bit and the ethanol sort of sets >> >up the hook bit, but I agree it can either come out >> >smoother somehow or a different approach too. That last >> >line before the hook has to set it up as if to say >> >2+2=hook. Sitting here now thinking about it, we could >> > keep the structure/melody of the chorus as it is now >> >but only sneak another line in right before the hook to >> >set it up both phrase-wise, melody-wise and give resolve. >> >Sort of two schools of thought here. One can have a >> >chorus with enough semetry and phrasing that the title is >> >included at the end, or that of having the title be >> >outside of that phrasing to stand out from the rest. You >> >know we could just run it by the NSAI group for opinions >> >to even if we don't have a full tune yet. It goes by >> >pretty fast and is a fun kind of tune. >> > >> > Brad >> > >> > At 12:31 PM 7/17/2007, you wrote: >> >>Hi Brad-- Thanks, that's real fun! The bridge works. We >> >>might tweak it later just slightly, but it's fine at this >> >>stage. >> >> >> >>I think we need to work on the line about Ethanol and try >> >>to improve continuity (find a better flow, so to speak) >> >>from the line before it, about the math, to the line >> >>after it, the hook line. There's a rhyme challenge there, >> >>but we can do it. >> >> >> >>I also wonder if this recording's ornate approach to >> >>singing the hook line doesn't pull curtains in front of >> >>the hook. I think it'd work real well for the end of the >> >>song, but not for the first time the hook is sung. With a >> >>short demo like this, of course, the two positions are >> >>one in the same. >> >> >> >>Overall, it sounds real good. Very, very singable and >> >>catchy! --Dan >> >> >> >> >> >>On Tue, 17 Jul 2007 09:58:49 -0600 >> >>Brad <[log in to unmask]> wrote: >> >> > Hi Dan, >> >> > >> >> > Here is my volley of V1, lift and chorus so far. I >> >>left >> >> >the lift I had for now and we can work on it but this >> >> >will give you an idea of what I was thinking musically >> >> >and etc. See what ya think and we'll go from there. You >> >> >should be able to get it at: >> >> > >> >> > http://www.braddunsemusic.com/bits/20YTG.mp3 >> >> > >> >> > I'm not totally settled on the bridge bit yet but I >> >>will >> >> >say it is short :) two lines tops which is probably OK >> >>on >> >> >this tune because the message is light and fast as >> >>well. >> >> > >> >> > Brad >> >> > >> >> > >> >> >> >> >> > >> > >> > > >and click on the stream for She's Long Gone. > >Brad